I will ink and tone this page when the rest of the chapter is done. I like to be able to go back and change things if I change my mind halfway through, or whateves.
Untitled 7, Page 1
5.17.2007
A Rough Draft of Page 1
I'm looking for feedback, of course. Serious critique! The page isn't quite finished being penciled, but I would like to know if the layout works, if it's interesting, boring, inproportional, etc...
I will ink and tone this page when the rest of the chapter is done. I like to be able to go back and change things if I change my mind halfway through, or whateves.
Untitled 7, Page 1
I will ink and tone this page when the rest of the chapter is done. I like to be able to go back and change things if I change my mind halfway through, or whateves.
Untitled 7, Page 1
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Hello Anise,
I really like panel 3 and 4. They are simple, easy to look at and convey the message well. However, panel 2, the room, is a bit confusing. For example the retangle on the box throws the picture off a bit. That panel also does not connect that well with 3 and 4. Are they in that room? Perhaps some suggestion that they are in that room would be best. For example you could show a part (a shoulder, the back) of one of the characters. Or simply put one of the bubble boxes (that's counting 1, 2, 3) in that panel.
Hope that helps! I want to see MORE.
I tried to show that packing was occuring, but you're right. It doesn't work. I need to take more time and make more panels.
Actually, it's interesting, I did this page to prove to myself that I can still draw. I still can, now I just need to do MORE.
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